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You should spend about 20 minutes on this Task. The table shows data about the average length of time (in minutes) that people of different ages spend in a consultation with family doctors in a number of countries. Write a report summarising the information. Select and describe the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this Task. The table shows data about the average length of time (in minutes) that people of different ages spend in a consultation with family doctors in a number of countries. Write a report summarising the information. Select and describe the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table gives data about the typical
time
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 that patients spend with doctors in various countries, split by
age
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 group. As the data indicates, the most common trend is consultation
time
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increases
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 consistently with
age
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.
For example
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, the figure in France doubled from 16 to 38
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 between the youngest and oldest people.
Likewise
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, the USA figures rise from 13 to 31, the UK from 9 to 21 and Italy from 17 to 29. These are all substantial
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. Chile, apart from showing the significantly lengthiest duration of patient consultation with medical officers at all ages,
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 shows the same pattern of increment but at a much slighter climb. Turning to the next point, Brazil
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 shows a rise,
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 , after
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 60, there is a decline from 26
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 to an eventual 20
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. India has a more marked rise and fall peaking at 21
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 for people aged 40-60, declining to 11
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 for 70 plus.
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, two countries are exceptions, Japan fluctuates across the
age
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 groups between 12 to 16
minutes
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.
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, Kenya shows a reverse pattern, doctor consultation
time
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 decreases as
age
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increases
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 from 15
minutes
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 for the youngest to 10
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 for the oldest people.
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,
time
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 spent with doctors generally
increases
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 with
age
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 except in Japan and Kenya.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, age, increases, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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