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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
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The given pie charts show the average usage of
energy
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 in a household in Australia, which implicates the number of greenhouse
gas
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emissions
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.
Overall
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, it is evident that heating consumes the highest
energy
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 followed by
water
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 heating which mainly contributes to
gas
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emissions
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,
while
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 lighting always marks the smallest in both.
Water
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 heating requires 30%
energy
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 to be used, resulting in 32% of
gas
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 released.
In contrast
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, refrigeration only takes 7% of
energy
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 but results in a doubled percentage of
gas
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emissions
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, which is 14%.
Similarly
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, other appliances
also
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 generate a higher proportion of
gas
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emissions
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 compared to the
energy
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 used, which is 15% to 28%, placing the second position after
water
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 heating. The other categories, which are heating, cooling, and lighting, generally produce less
gas
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emissions
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 with only 15%, 3%, and 8%, respectively.
However
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, heating marks the greatest usage among all categories with 42% followed by
water
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 heating, which has a moderate difference.
Otherwise
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, cooling and lighting only spend 2% and 4%, creating a significant difference in heating.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas, emissions, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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