The graph below shows the average monthly changes in the prices of three metals during 2014

The graph below shows the average monthly changes in the prices of three metals during 2014
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The graph illustrates the rate of value differences each month
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2014. The study involved three distinct materials, which were
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copper
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, tickle and zink By and large,
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nickle
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shown the greatest changes. These were
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the highest
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at the
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and the lowest
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the middle of the studied period. In terms of nickel, obviously, the rate of change was 6% in January,
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dropped to 1% in March, and almost to 0.8%in May.
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decline was seen to -3% in June, before rising again to -2% in October.
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percentage was followed by a final increase
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to 1
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, Copper and
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, both
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almost the same trends. At the beginning of the study, an increase of 2% and 3%, for copper and zink,respectively. These figures were followed by a drop to -0.5%, and -1% in the same orders. Fluctuations for both were the
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before rising to almost 2% for both in December.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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