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Nowadays more and more tasks at home and at work are being performed by robots. Why do you think it’s happening? Is it a negative or positive development?

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In our modern
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called “
robot
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” is not an unfamiliar state.
Robots
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 are now
applying
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 in many tasks of
life
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such
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 as at home or even at
work
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.
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also
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 present the opinion with development’s negative. The main advantage of the
robot
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’s appearance is the
convinience
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convenience
 that will bring to our normal
life
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. In the past, our
life
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 seemed very underdeveloped
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 everything was done by
hands
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Whereas
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, day by day, it becomes more and more
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 how we apply the
robots
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 in daily
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. Easily use it to help do housework,
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: cleaning the house, cleaning the dishes…
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, the outstanding of those
robots
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also
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apply
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 in
work
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 to assign the tasks that people give out. Some
robots
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 are helping to analyse the trash or in the economic
industry
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industry,
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 it to help cut down the
personel
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personnel
due to
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 decrease the cost for
company
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the company
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.
As a consequence
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, the development of
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robots
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 in our routine
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support
to
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us to
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done
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 all the
work
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On the other hand
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, there is a controversy around
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robots
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how
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and how
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it
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they
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 constantly appear in our daily
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life
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lives
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 and at
work
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. If the main advantage of
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robot
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robots
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 is making our
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life
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 more
convinience
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convenience
convenient
,
so
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the main disadvantage will be abusing the
robots
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. It is
abviously
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obviously
 being seen that one-person
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 the
robot
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into
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in
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 daily
life
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 will
cause
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 to reduce their
individual’s
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 quality
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 as their physical ability or mindset, the effect as applying
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robot
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robots
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into
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to
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home’s
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home
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assignment
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assignments
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 will make
person
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a person
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more and more lazier
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lazier and lazier
lazier
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 and it
reduce
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 your physical ability
while
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done
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do
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works
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work
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 by
hands
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, so how can we do daily activities in usual ways
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 the long-term of
robot
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’s appearance.
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,
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the
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 capability of the
robot
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cause
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to
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the demand
of
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for
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work’s
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work
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oppoturnity
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opportunity
 which
maybe
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 a bigger effect
in
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 the
working-place
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workplace
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. If we strongly apply in almost the chain of one’s company
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cause
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to
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the
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 lack of human resources.
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 and
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 issues. In conclusion, the positive and the negative of
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robot’s
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the robot’s
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 appearance
are
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still
happened
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happen
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 with the mutual balance, the
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negative
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 aspect was illustrated which left some problems that we should consider and find new
solution
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solutions
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.
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 If not, it will
cause
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to
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more and more problems.

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grammar
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coherence and cohesion
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task achievement
The essay successfully covers both positive and negative aspects of the topic, showcasing a balanced viewpoint.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of the essay is clear, with a defined introduction and conclusion, aiding smooth reading.
task achievement
Key ideas are presented logically, and the essay maintains a clear focus on the topic throughout.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • robotics
  • automation
  • revolutionized
  • industries 4.0
  • mundane
  • intricate tasks
  • technological advancement
  • accessible
  • efficiency
  • precision
  • economic factors
  • labor costs
  • dependency
  • quality of life
  • creative
  • strategic
  • interpersonal tasks
  • innovation
  • job opportunities
  • job displacement
  • digital divide
  • marginalized
  • environmental impact
  • disposal
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