Advertisements of snacks and toys have a great impact on children and their parents. So, the advertisements to children should be banned. Do you agree or disagree?

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huge improvement in technology, many access that can show everybody about everything happening in the world, and
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people use
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strategy, particularly for
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business
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to sell
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products
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let's say
snacks
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and
toys
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that
give
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have
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large
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effect
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the family
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family
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both
for
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parents
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as provider and
kids
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as
consumer
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a consumer
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.
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my viewpoint. Looking
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the details the big
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about
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big
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improvement
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of
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technology is that we can't decide solely
give
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impact
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an impact
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to
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adults but
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provide to
kids
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,
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like advertisements of
snacks
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and
toys
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will distract and influence them to have
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them
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, and ask
to
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their
parents
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to buy.
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, believe
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them compromise. I
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part for
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a parent
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parent
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to provide their
kids
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base
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on their plan, not because
kids
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asked
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them to give it to them, so
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parent's
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parents
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can decide which
te
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best things that they need to give to their
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that help for
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process.
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,
kids
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saw
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one
tv
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TV
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proggramme
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programme
programmes
about
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and ask
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parents
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their parents
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to buy it,
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the next
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will ask again to buy it,
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consumtion
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consumption
or maybe addiction, and
parents
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will have a tough
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to provide
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all of these.
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, the benefit of advertisement
if
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is through to the
parents
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,
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will give them more options to pick something that their needs about
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kids
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snacks
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or even
toys
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.
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,
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parent's
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parents
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will
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time
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and kind of help to quickly
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without
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a lot of
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in
supermarket
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the supermarket
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, because they already
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own list. Namely,
parents
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with work office
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,
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need to provide
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that give nutrition to their
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, as simple as checking the advertisement and choosing at their break
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continue
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go to the supermarket to pick these stuff that already decided before, so
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for them. In conclusion,
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parent's
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need to control
things
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the things
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that they provide to their
kids
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, not tho
give
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giving
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habbit
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habit
to compromise that
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to
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a negative
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side, and I strongly believe
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advertisement
snacks
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and
toys
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will
give
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have
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impact of strick to
kids
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and should banned.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • impressionable
  • pester
  • tactical advertising strategies
  • financial strain
  • consumerism
  • materialistic attitudes
  • commercial free speech
  • innovative products
  • consumer exposure
  • informed choices
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