The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

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The given maps depict the plan of

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educational building in 2004 and

future

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the future

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reconstruction of

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school

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the school

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site in 2024.

Overall

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there will be slight changes in

the

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apply

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2024. The

amount

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of buildings will be increased and

quantity

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the number

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of students will

be grown

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grow

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from 600 to 1000.

According to

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the picture

school

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building 1 in the bottom left corner and

school

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building 2 lower across the path will be connected via hall through 20 years. If look

further

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to the north-east the sports field can be replaced by new 3 construction in the future and will be moved below

this

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building.

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Additionally

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its size will be gotten smaller.

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Also

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the additional car park, which is to the right of

school

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building 3, is going to

be occurred

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occur

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. And car parks 1 and 2 will be

bind

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bound

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using

road

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the road

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in the

center

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centre

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of the map. From the

left

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left,

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the road will be gone under the educational construction 2

then

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between

sports

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the sports

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field and

school

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building 3 to car park 2.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

169 words

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The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

In many modern societies, grandchildren rarely spend any quality time with their grandparents. What do you think are the consequences of this?

Many people belive that schools should teach children to become good citizens and workers rather than independent individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion and relevant examples.

A government has a responsibility to its citizens to ensure their safety. Therefore, some people think that the government should increase spending on defense but spend less on social benefits. To what extend do you agree?

How do changes in population growth and urbanisation relate to the industrial revolution