The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

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The diagram illustrates the

school

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site in 2004 and

it's

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its

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reconstruction plans for 2024.

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school

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territory will

expierence

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experience

a big amount of changes by 2024: almost all objects will change their position,

also

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student capacity will be increased from 600 to 1000.

Firtsly

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Firstly

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the school

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school yard

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schoolyard

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in 2004

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only one zone for parking in front of the main entrance, which

is continues

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with a path for pedestrians only.

Path

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is connected

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both

school

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buildings and with

big

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a big

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sport

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field.

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south

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and east sides of

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school

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the school

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are free,

filled

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with trees.

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according to

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the plan for 2024,

first

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and

second

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school

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buildings will be connected by a new hall, which is

result

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the result

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apply

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reconstruction.

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this

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fact,

long

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the long

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path will be shorted, having a starting point from the new hall, that leads easter, to the big new third building(

accommodates

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which accommodates

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400 students). Behind

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the third

building

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building,

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there will be added

second

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car parking

that is

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linked with the main entrance and

also

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touches a

second

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building. Southier from

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second

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the second

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car

parking

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park

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will be located

sport

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sports

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fields, smaller than the original one.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, second with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

189 words

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The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

Some people think that tha government is wasting money on tha art and that this money could be better spend elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are your opinion on this?

Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The arts,including arts, music and theater are considered to be important in society. Do you think the arts still have a place amongst our modern lifestyles? Should the arts be included in the school curriculum?

You saw an advert in the newspaper asking for volunteers to help run a charity event. Write a letter of application to the organizers. In your letter: -explain why you are interested in helping -Give details suitable past experience -suggest ways you might help with the event.