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The table shows the Contribution of Various Economic Sectors to X country Gross Domestic Product in 2016, 2017 and 2018.

The table illustrates the percentage of
contribution
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 of three various economic sectors (
Agriculture
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, Industry, and
Service
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) to X country gross domestic product in three different years (2016 , 2017 and 2018).
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, it can be clearly seen that the
service
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sector
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 had the highest
contribution
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 over the period given,
while
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agriculture
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 had the lowest
contribution
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 .
Moreover
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, the
contribution
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 from
agriculture
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 and industry increased,
whereas
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 the
contribution
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 from
service
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 decreased. With regards to contributions of
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agriculture
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the agriculture
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sector
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, it went up from 13% in 2016 and touched the highest point of around 15% in the
last
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 year.
Likewise
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, in the cases of
industry
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the industry
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sector
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, it rose from 22% in the first year and
then
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 it climaxed to approximately 30% in 2018.
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, the
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 of
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service
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the service
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sector
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 fluctuated slightly beginning at 65% and dropped by a mere 1% in 2017.
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this
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 period, the figure declined to more than a fifth (55%).

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