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The charts below give information about the number of hours that students study each day at five different universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about the number of hours that students study each day at five different universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graphs illustrate the comparison of study
time
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 (
weekdays
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 and
weekends
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) of the
students
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 across five different countries .
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
students
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has
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have
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 more
time
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studying
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to study on
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weekdays
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 compared to
weekend
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weekends
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.
Furthermore
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,
students
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 in
country
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 C recorded the highest number of study
hours
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 during
weekdays
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,
whereas
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 learners from
country
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 D
has
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had
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 the lowest
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hours
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number of hours
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 studying during
weekends
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. During
weekdays
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,
students
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 from
nation
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nations
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 C,
B
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, and E
spends
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spend
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 most of their
time
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 studying, particularly C with 10.6
hours
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 ,
this
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 is closely followed by
country
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B
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 with 10.1 and
B
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 with 10.
Moreover
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,
students
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 from nations A and D have only less than 10
hours
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 of studying
in
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on
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weekdays
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.
Conversely
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, most of the
students
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 have less
time
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 studying during
weekends
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.
Students
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 in
country
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 A allocate 9
hours
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 of study,
while
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B
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 has only 8.6
hours
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. Meanwhile,
country
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 D has the highest
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hours
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number of hours
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 of studying during
weekdays
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this
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 is
in contrast
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during
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to
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weekends
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 with only 5.6 and
country
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 E with 6.2.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, weekdays, weekends, students, country, hours, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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