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Band 3.5

Some people say that it is possible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree.

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It is
dabeted
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debated
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 that a country can balance economic success with environmental sustainability. Some argue that
economical
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economic
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growth
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 and
clean
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a clean
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environment
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 can coexist through
modern
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modernity and
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 that the pursuit of profit inevitably leads to environmental degradation.
Economical
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Economic
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 rise and a clean
nature
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 can happen at the same time. When we use more modern
method
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methods
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 of police.
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example
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 in many developed countries
such
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 as Korea and
Japan
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Japan,
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 they utilise more developed devices
such
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 as green technology
for
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to
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 achieve a healthy
nature
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.
This
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 shows us we can
also
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 attain
to
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apply
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growth
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 without damaging
nature
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.
Economical
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Economic
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 success often causes harm to the
environment
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.
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While some
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Some
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 factories and industries
are pollute
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are polluting
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 more water and air, soil and they trying to make more money
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to expand
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expand
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by expanding
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 their budget.
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instance
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instance,
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 in India and
Dubai
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Dubai,
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 there
have
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is
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 deforestation and dirty air
due to
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 rapid
growth
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. People who live in
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this
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these
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 kinds of areas
they
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apply
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do not believe that it is hard to balance
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growth
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the growth
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 of countries' money and
prevent
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protect
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 natural places.
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, businesses focus more on
getting
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making
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profit
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a profit
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 than protecting the
environment
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.
To conclude
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, it is possible to prevent
nature
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 with
rise
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the rise
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 of
economy
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the economy
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while
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 economic
growth
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 can damage the
environment
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. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 if countries plan carefully and use modern technology. Balancing these two factors is important for the future.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Improve the logical flow between sentences and ideas to make the essay more seamless. Use more connecting words and phrases to ensure clarity.
Task Achievement
Ensure that your main arguments are comprehensively supported by more specific examples or statistics. This would strengthen your position.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure each paragraph expresses one clear main idea, with supporting sentences that contribute coherently to that idea.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, making it easy to follow.
Task Achievement
Your use of real-world examples like those of Korea and Japan add credibility to your argument and show a good effort in task performance.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economically successful
  • Clean environment
  • Sustainable practices
  • Green technologies
  • Eco-tourism
  • Healthier workforce
  • Healthcare costs
  • Short-term economic growth
  • Profit over environment
  • Heavy industries
  • Developing countries
  • Sacrifice
  • Economic development
  • Transitioning
  • Balance
  • Sustainable development
  • International cooperation
  • Incentivize
  • Eco-friendly business practices
  • Investment in education
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