Some people say that it is possible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree.

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that a country can balance economic success with environmental sustainability. Some argue that
economical
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economic
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growth
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and
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a clean
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environment
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can coexist through
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modernity and
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that the pursuit of profit inevitably leads to environmental degradation.
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rise and a clean
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can happen at the same time. When we use more modern
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of police.
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in many developed countries
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as Korea and
Japan
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Japan,
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they utilise more developed devices
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as green technology
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achieve a healthy
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.
This
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shows us we can
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attain
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growth
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without damaging
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.
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success often causes harm to the
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.
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factories and industries
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more water and air, soil and they trying to make more money
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expand
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their budget.
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instance
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in India and
Dubai
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there
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deforestation and dirty air
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rapid
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. People who live in
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kinds of areas
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do not believe that it is hard to balance
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growth
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the growth
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of countries' money and
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natural places.
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, businesses focus more on
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making
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profit
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a profit
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than protecting the
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.
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, it is possible to prevent
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with
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the rise
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of
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while
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economic
growth
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can damage the
environment
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. In my
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opinion,
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if countries plan carefully and use modern technology. Balancing these two factors is important for the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economically successful
  • Clean environment
  • Sustainable practices
  • Green technologies
  • Eco-tourism
  • Healthier workforce
  • Healthcare costs
  • Short-term economic growth
  • Profit over environment
  • Heavy industries
  • Developing countries
  • Sacrifice
  • Economic development
  • Transitioning
  • Balance
  • Sustainable development
  • International cooperation
  • Incentivize
  • Eco-friendly business practices
  • Investment in education
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