Some people believe that most crime is a result of circumstances, e.g. poverty and other social problems. Others, however, believe most crime is caused by people who are bad by nature.
 Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that there are many reasons why people are doing
crimes
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.
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it is a commonly held belief that the purpose of most
crimes
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is poverty, circumstances, and other social problems, there is
also
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an argument it
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individuals
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who are bad by nature.
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essay will analyse
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topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On one hand, when a person
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many social problems that
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to
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his
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personality to be worse.
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, sometimes people are forced to
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a crime for the reason of
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or
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because they
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have children to feed.
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, most
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crimes
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are
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always happen in poor areas which
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been approved by many researchers.
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, recent research by the University of Prince Sultan has shown that 62% of
crimes
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that happen in Riyadh city are
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located
in only one area.
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, some people believe that crime is often committed by
individuals
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who are inherently immoral or driven by greed. These
individuals
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may not be influenced by poverty or hardship but
instead
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commit
crimes
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due to
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psychological tendencies or a lack of moral values.
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, cases of corporate fraud or insider trading highlight how even
individuals
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in privileged positions engage in illegal activities for personal gain.
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perspective argues that
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crimes
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are not driven by necessity but by greed and a disregard for societal rules. In conclusion, there is no easy answer
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this
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question. On balance,
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, I tend to believe that most
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crimes
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happened
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by
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due to
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external effects
such
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as poverty and other social problems like unemployment
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Consider providing more specific examples to strengthen your arguments and ensure they are directly relevant to your points.
coherence cohesion
Some sentences have minor grammatical errors. Revising for subject-verb agreement and verb tense consistency can enhance clarity and readability.
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The essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, maintaining good logical flow and structure.
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The essay successfully addresses both perspectives, demonstrating a comprehensive understanding of the task.
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