Today, many people are suffering from health problems because of fast food the Government should tax higher fast food what is your opinion about this?

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In recent days, more and more humans are facing

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health issues

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junk

food

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reasons.

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, it is believed that the

Goverment

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government

has to increase taxes for those types of foods.

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, nowadays depression and anxiety

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consumption

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bad quality

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food

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to say, those mental problems

are

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frequently

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after

food

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habbits

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habits

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sedentary

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lifestyle,

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. Mental disorders

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specific nutrients restored and high

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amount

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of good fats,

proteins

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and proteins

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. Unfortunately, fast

food

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does not have them at all, depending on

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we see

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problem.

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medical journals mental

dissabilities

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disabilities

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raising

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every year, demanding of huge

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antidepresssants

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antidepressants

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intake.

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, unhealthy

food

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globaly

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globally

recognised as one of

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the trigers

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trigers

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triggers

of different types of illnesses. What I mean by

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fast

food

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consits

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contains

incredible

amount

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fats

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of fats

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, carbs and a few

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of proteins.

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, there

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no vitamins or minerals inside. All of those things lead to bad circulation of blood flow and digestive problems which contribute to

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apperance

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appearance

of diseases

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as diabetes and obesity. In fact, in the USA more than 50%

people

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of people

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are obese.

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, it may turn

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irreversable

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irreversible

processes in the body which even the medicines can not

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fix.

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, many people in the world are suffering from health conditions,

such

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as mental problems and chronic disorders,

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why the

Goverment

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government

has to take care of locals and increase taxes for junk

food

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producers. I do believe that those foods

has

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eliminated

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especcially

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especially

, for children to prevent them from illnesses and

make

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higher taxes for those foods are good

deccision

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decision

decisions

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

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Topic Vocabulary:

Health ramifications
Obesity epidemic
Chronic diseases
Healthcare expenditures
Fiscal measures
Public health policy
Sin tax
Nutritional value
Preventative health care
Socioeconomic status
Nutritional literacy
Consumer behavior
Food desert
Heart disease
Type 2 diabetes
Metabolic syndrome
Balanced diet
Processed foods
Health equity

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Today, many people are suffering from health problems because of fast food the Government should tax higher fast food what is your opinion about this?

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