You found a problem with the item which you bought it online. Write a letter to the company manager. In your letter, you should: • describe the item • explain what the issue is • suggest what you expect the manager to do

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Dear Sir, I am writing to express my disappointment with a laptop I purchased through your online website on 1 December 2024. The product, an Apple model series number 2355628, has not been functioning as expected since day first. The primary issue is with the battery, which does not hold a charge time of more than 30 minutes despite being advertised to

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up to 8 hours.

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, the system frequently stopped

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functioning some tasks making it difficult to complete my work tasks on time. I request you to please take

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matter into consideration and either replace the laptop or refund me in full. I appreciate it if you could arrange a pickup from home as I have a busy schedule and would not be able to visit the store in person. please let me know how you would like to resolve

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issue. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Alex

Submitted by shubhdeepkaur2 on Mon Dec 09 2024

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coherence

Ensure complete coherence in conveying your issues with the laptop for a more unified and coherent response.

writing tone

Try to maintain a consistently formal tone throughout, as some casual elements might detract from the overall tone.

greeting

The letter begins and ends with appropriate formal greetings, enhancing its professionalism.

task response

The task response is mostly thorough, with a clear description of the product and the issues faced.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

157 words

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