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the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparision where relevant.

the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparision where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the responses that people
of
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from
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 five different cities in Australia gave to a survey about their
coffee
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 and tea expenditure and how often they drink.
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, what stands out from the graph is that drinking out has the most popularity by far
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 just in Adelaide it was tied with buying
instant
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coffee
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. Regarding the numbers in Sydney, it shows that over 60% of residents
are
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intrested
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interested
to have
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in having
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 a drink in a cafe during the
last
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 4 weeks,
whereas
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 Buying fresh
coffee
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 is almost as popular as
instant
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coffee
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, with approximately 45% and 43% respectively. As for Melbourne same pattern is repeated, just under 64% went to a cafe, and roughly almost half of them bought
instant
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coffee
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 and the third place is for fresh
coffee
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 with 42%. Samely if we look at the percentages for Brisbane, over half of them went out to have a cup of
coffee
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, 52%
perfered
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preferred
 to buy
instant
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coffee
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 which is roughly twice as high as
this
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 amount for fresh
coffee
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. Looking at the details in Hobart the flew is similar, the figure for the first place is tied with it in Melbourne,
three fifth
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three-fifths
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 of them spent money on fresh
one
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ones
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whereas
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 for snapp
coffee
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this
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 number doubled. The flow is slightly different in Adelaide going out and having a
snapp
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snap
coffee
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 at home headed the list by 50% of the
residence
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residents
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 and the second place is for
fersh
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fresh
coffee
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 with 35%
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, instant with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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