The line graph shows male and female gym membership over a thirty-year period. The vertical axis represents the number of members in units of 1000. The horizontal axis represents the period from 1980 to 2010

The line graph shows male and female gym membership over a thirty-year period. The vertical axis represents the number of members in units of 1000. The horizontal axis represents the period from 1980 to 2010
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The data presents male and female gym membership between 1980 to 2010.
Overall
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, males registered for the gym more than females throughout the given period.
However
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, the
number
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of male
members
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fluctuated compared to women which shows a very stable graph. In 1980, the
number
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of male
members
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was 2000, which significantly rose over 5
years
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and reached 4000 in 1985. But the
number
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of male
members
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started to decrease and after 10
years
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of falling, it reached just below 2000, in
this
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period female
members
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outran the male
members
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. After 5
years
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hitting the lowest
number
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, the
number
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of male
members
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dramatically increased till 2005, reaching the highest pick in the graph. But unfortunately, it declined very fast reaching lower than approximately 1000. In the case of women, the
number
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of
members
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was 1000 in 1980 and it rose steadily till 1985. From 1985 to 1990 the gym maintained a
number
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of women
members
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. But the
number
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started to grow very high and reached a peak in 1995, which was just below 3000. After reaching the highest pick it had little ups and downs several times for the next 10
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. but still, it shows a very stable graph compared to male
members
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, members, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Vertical axis
  • Horizontal axis
  • Gym membership
  • Male and female
  • Trends
  • Increase / Decrease
  • Peak / Drop
  • Comparison
  • Equality / Inequality
  • Period / Time-frame
  • Cultural shifts
  • Health awareness
  • Economic factors
  • Target market
  • Marketing strategies
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