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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates key information about the significant kinds of
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 fuel in the UK and its level of production between 1981 and 2000. The
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 are measured
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energy
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, it is clear from the graph that petroleum has a significant
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 during the given
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. In 1981 it was about 90
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, and there was a dramatic
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 in 1986 it was about 140
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 and
then
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 dropped slightly to become 100
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 in 1991. In 2000, the petroleum rose up again to reach 140
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According to
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 what is shown, it can be observed that coal fluctuated during the given
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, it started in 1981 with 80
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, and
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 it decreased to 40
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. Notable,
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 there slight
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 which is about 60
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 between 1986 and 1991. In terms of natural gas,
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 was steady during the
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 between 1981 and 1991, it was approximately 40
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, there
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sharp
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increase
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 in the
period
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 between 1996 and 2000, it was about 100
energy
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units
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "it is clear that".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, units, increase, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fuel production
  • Trend
  • Steady
  • Fluctuations
  • Significant
  • Milestones
  • Turning point
  • Peak
  • Decline
  • Evolve
  • Notable
  • Summarize
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