Aircraft have been increasingly used for transport fruit and vegetable to some country where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people
There is no denying the fact that aircraft usage
have
been strongly Change the verb form
has
increase
for delivering fruit and Change the verb form
increasing
increased
vegetable
to Fix the agreement mistake
vegetables
few
countries Correct article usage
a few
who
are suffering Correct pronoun usage
that
to grow
plants or are out of season. some men and women think Change preposition
from growing
that is
a great idea Linking Words
while
some are opposes it. Linking Words
this
essay will analyse Linking Words
this
topic from both Linking Words
point
of view.
On Change to a plural noun
points
one
hand, supporting other continents may be beneficial for countries who Correct article usage
the one
provied
them. Correct your spelling
provided
provide
Linking Words
in
other words, if officials think of it from an Capitalize word
In
economical
way, they might get Replace the word
economic
high
amount of income Add an article
a high
due to
high demand. which Linking Words
make
their country richer than before. Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
also
another point to consider, helping people gives you Linking Words
wonderful
reputation among others. Add an article
a wonderful
For example
, when Saudi Arabia Linking Words
have
helped Unnecessary verb
apply
Syria
during Use synonyms
it
civil war by supplying Change the pronoun
its
Syria
with many Use synonyms
diffirent
Correct your spelling
different
kind
of food. and when the war Change to a plural noun
kinds
have
stopped and people Unnecessary verb
apply
have
discovered that Saudi Arabia Unnecessary verb
apply
have
Wrong verb form
had
standed
with Correct your spelling
stood
Syria
it got Use synonyms
an
amazing feedback from it and everyone Remove the article
apply
were
never been happier because of it Verb problem
has
espicially
Correct your spelling
especially
Syria
's citizens.
Use synonyms
On the other hand
, using aircraft many times Linking Words
have
some side effects. Correct subject-verb agreement
has
such
as it Linking Words
cost
a lot of money it is Wrong verb form
costs
also
possible to say that, it Linking Words
need
a lot of resources to spent so richer countries can give. so Change the verb form
needs
this
might lead to low income Linking Words
so
Correct word choice
apply
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
make
the country poorer than Wrong verb form
making
being
rich. For Unnecessary verb
apply
instince
, in 1890 Japan decided to help Somalia by Correct your spelling
instance
provieding
them Correct your spelling
providing
150
billion Change preposition
with 150
seed
so Somalia Fix the agreement mistake
seeds
can
grow multiple fruits like Wrong verb form
could
banana
,Fix the agreement mistake
bananas
apple
and Fix the agreement mistake
apples
pinapple
. and Correct your spelling
pineapple
then
in 1892 after 2 years Japan had Linking Words
insuffecent
amount of these 3 types of fruit which led them to ask for help Correct your spelling
insufficient
insted
of just giving it.
In conclusion, helping Correct your spelling
instead
other
could Fix the agreement mistake
others
benefits
you in many ways. Change the verb form
benefit
however
, you have to ask Linking Words
you self
before doing it. is it affordable or not? meaning that you have to consider Correct your spelling
yourself
about
yourself first Change preposition
apply
Linking Words
then
decide whether you want to support or not.Correct word choice
and then
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task achievement
The essay addresses the task by discussing both sides of the argument regarding the use of aircraft to transport fruits and vegetables. However, it could benefit from a clearer stance or more balanced analysis. Consider explicitly stating your opinion in the introduction or conclusion for clearer task response.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. While the introduction and conclusion are present and effective, some points within the body paragraphs could use clearer linking words to enhance flow.
general linguistic
Try to improve sentence structure and word choice to enhance clarity. Some sentences are a bit awkward or unclear, which could confuse the reader. Focus on eliminating grammatical errors and refining vocabulary.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes a well-framed introduction and conclusion, which helps in setting up the structure of the argument.
task achievement
You used specific examples (Saudi Arabia helping Syria; Japan assisting Somalia) to demonstrate points, which strengthens your argument through real-world connections.