Aircraft have been increasingly used for transport fruit and vegetable to some country where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people

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There is no denying the fact that aircraft usage
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been strongly
increase
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for delivering fruit and
vegetable
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vegetables
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to
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countries
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are suffering
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plants or are out of season. some men and women think
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a great idea
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some are opposes it.
this
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essay will analyse
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topic from both
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of view. On
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hand, supporting other continents may be beneficial for countries who
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provided
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them.
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in
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other words, if officials think of it from an
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way, they might get
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amount of income
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high demand. which
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their country richer than before.
also
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another point to consider, helping people gives you
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reputation among others.
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, when Saudi Arabia
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helped
Syria
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during
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civil war by supplying
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with many
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different
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of food. and when the war
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stopped and people
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discovered that Saudi Arabia
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standed
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with
Syria
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amazing feedback from it and everyone
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never been happier because of it
espicially
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especially
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's citizens.
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, using aircraft many times
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some side effects.
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as it
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a lot of money it is
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possible to say that, it
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a lot of resources to spent so richer countries can give. so
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might lead to low income
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it
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make
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the country poorer than
being
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rich. For
instince
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instance
, in 1890 Japan decided to help Somalia by
provieding
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providing
them
150
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billion
seed
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so Somalia
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grow multiple fruits like
banana
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bananas
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,
apple
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apples
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and
pinapple
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pineapple
. and
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in 1892 after 2 years Japan had
insuffecent
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insufficient
amount of these 3 types of fruit which led them to ask for help
insted
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instead
of just giving it. In conclusion, helping
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others
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could
benefits
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you in many ways.
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, you have to ask
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before doing it. is it affordable or not? meaning that you have to consider
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yourself first
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decide whether you want to support or not.
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task achievement
The essay addresses the task by discussing both sides of the argument regarding the use of aircraft to transport fruits and vegetables. However, it could benefit from a clearer stance or more balanced analysis. Consider explicitly stating your opinion in the introduction or conclusion for clearer task response.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. While the introduction and conclusion are present and effective, some points within the body paragraphs could use clearer linking words to enhance flow.
general linguistic
Try to improve sentence structure and word choice to enhance clarity. Some sentences are a bit awkward or unclear, which could confuse the reader. Focus on eliminating grammatical errors and refining vocabulary.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes a well-framed introduction and conclusion, which helps in setting up the structure of the argument.
task achievement
You used specific examples (Saudi Arabia helping Syria; Japan assisting Somalia) to demonstrate points, which strengthens your argument through real-world connections.
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