Some people think that government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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craft is a form of feeling, culture, and history
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it gives feathers to one's imagination. Some individuals believe that bureaucrats are spending a lot of money on the arts which is not worthy and could be spent on other things. I partially agree with
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with, through expertise bodies know about the history of the nation
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as in museums and galleries there are numerous paintings, statues and pictures related to our culture and history. society
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these kinds of museums because regard government has to maintain these places so that they can preserve
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earn their bread and butter through
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contribute through their amazing work and represent the country on an international level
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as in exhibitions. To illustrate, recently wax museum with extremely popular
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statues opened in Mumbai and a plethora of crowd visit
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revenue for bureaucracy.
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, there are tremendous other issues
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as shortage of food, mentally ill children, poverty, shortage of shelter
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crime etc. The government can spend money to improve the education system as it is more imperative as compared to the arts.
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, they need to keep an eye on poverty as every day thousands of people die
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a shortage of food because they can not afford it.
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, children are the future of any country and high bodies should invest in their growth
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, they should take care of sick children who are staying in care homes
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, they can have a good future. In conclusion, artistry is important to preserve but not more than today's issues, if the future of the country is not healthy what authority will do with
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So, the government should highlight other problems as well and they should spend money wisely.
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task achievement
Clarify and elaborate on how spending on arts affects other sectors more significantly.
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Improve sentence structure for clarity.
introduction conclusion
The introduction clearly states the position and outlines the structure of the essay.
task achievement
The essay covers both viewpoints, providing a balanced discussion.
supported main points
Examples such as the wax museum in Mumbai effectively illustrate points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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