The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.
The pie charts below illustrate the percentages of devices people in the 18-25 age group
use
to watch television in Camada in 2009 and 2019. Wrong verb form
used
overall
, there are five different items in Linking Words
this
statistic. Linking Words
It is clear that
conventional Linking Words
TV
was the highest percentage in 2009. Use synonyms
in contrast
, Flat-screen Linking Words
TV
has the lowest figure in the same year.
Use synonyms
To begin
with, conventional Linking Words
TV
Use synonyms
got
suddenly decreased by 30% in 2019. Verb problem
apply
although
it was one-third of Canadian people. Linking Words
Also
, laptops scored 20% in the first year. Linking Words
Then
, it went down to 12% in the second year, Linking Words
Furthermore
, the desktop computer dropped by 8%.
Linking Words
On the other hand
, the Linking Words
tablet
increased about four times higher than in 2009. Fix the agreement mistake
number of tablets
in addition
, Flat-screen Linking Words
Use synonyms
TV
started with only 8% and jumped to 27% in 2019 with a similar number Fix the agreement mistake
TVs
with
other types of screens. Change preposition
to
Lastly
, the figure Linking Words
of
mobile phones was 15% and increased more 11% to become 26% in 2019.Change preposition
for
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tv with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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