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Studying a language in a country where it is spoken by the majority of citizens is the best way to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argue that learning a foreign
language
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 in order to improve their education and
skills
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 for job opportunities. I strongly believe, that learning in a
country
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 where the
language
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 is more makes it faster to learn, for many it may be too expensive or stressful to study abroad.
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, learning in a
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 makes it faster and more easier. If they only learn at home, it will be used only in their classroom.
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, when studying abroad can improve their
skills
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 which can give them more positive
skills
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 for job opportunities.
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, they can meet local people in a
country
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 where the
language
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 is. They can speak and learn about their accents, slang, and pronunciations. I believe
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 makes them more effective in improving their speaking and increasing their job qualifications.
On the other hand
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, there are several drawbacks to studying in a foreign
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. Study abroad needs more money to survive in another
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. There are more expensive stuff when they live abroad
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 as accommodation and health assurance.
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, they should spend more on their accommodations, living places, meals, and health assurance.
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, if they live abroad they are far away from their family and they do not know anyone.
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,
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 makes them feel homesick because difficult to adapt. In conclusion, I believe learning a foreign
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 in a foreign
country
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 may lead to faster learning which can improve their speaking
skills
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.
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, learning abroad may
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 have financial and psychological drawbacks. It is important for individuals to consider carefully before choosing to study abroad.

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You've presented a balanced view by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of studying a language abroad.
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