The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
The line graph shows the
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number
people
who join in five various Use synonyms
type
of activities at a social centre in Australia over a Change to a plural noun
types
period
of 20 years starting from 2000. Use synonyms
Moreover
, the activities are Linking Words
film
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club
, martial arts, amateur Use synonyms
dramatics
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table
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tennis
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performances
.
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Overall
, the Linking Words
numbers
of Use synonyms
participants
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of
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in
film
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club
and martial arts were almost stable Fix the agreement mistake
clubs
througout
the Correct your spelling
throughout
period
. Meanwhile, Use synonyms
table
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tennis
and musical Use synonyms
performances
had upward trends Use synonyms
while
amateur Linking Words
dramatics
experienced a downward trend.
There were almost 65 Use synonyms
participants
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for
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in
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film
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the film
club
in 2000 which Use synonyms
were
the highest rate among all other activities. After that, it had a marginal decrease to 60 Correct subject-verb agreement
was
people
in 2010. Meanwhile, musical Use synonyms
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performances'
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performances
participants
accounted for approximately 10 Use synonyms
while
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have been
zero in 2000. In 2010, the Wrong verb form
was
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numbers
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number
people
who Use synonyms
moreover
joined Linking Words
table
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tennis
and amateur Use synonyms
dramatics
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equaled
20. Change the spelling
equalled
Additionally
, martial arts' rates Linking Words
flactuated
from 35 to 40 Correct your spelling
fluctuated
fluctuate
people
in a Use synonyms
period
of 10 years Use synonyms
started
from 2000.
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starting
musical
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number of musical
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performances'
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performances
participants
grew Use synonyms
near
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to near
people
in 2020. The Use synonyms
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numbers
of Fix the agreement mistake
number
people
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furthermore
joined Linking Words
table
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tennis
plummeted to 50 in 2020.Use synonyms
However
, Linking Words
amatuer
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amateur
dramatics
fell to five Use synonyms
people
at that time. In the whole Use synonyms
period
, Use synonyms
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film
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the film
club
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most
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the most
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