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The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays,
people
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's awareness of their rights is rising.
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, there are many claims for extending weekends and having a shorter working week.
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, there are
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 opponents to
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 perspective. In
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 essay, I will analyse both views and express my own opinion. On the one hand, there are those who advocate the idea of having longer weekends. Having more free
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 will lead to less pressure during the week and more time to focus on our mental health.
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, there is a lot of pressure on workers which can be reduced by having a longer weekend.
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, it
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 helps employees' mental health.
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, having more spare times mean higher quality time with family and friends which may
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 lead to better performance on the job.
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, longer weekends can boost
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's energy and cause superior results in their performances.
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, there are others who disagree with having a shorter working week. They believe that
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 of having shorter
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 hours, companies should offer more generous benefits like rewards or office parties. More benefits will
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 cause job satisfaction and productivity. Another issue is nowadays
people
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 are dealing with lots of economic problems and cutting their
work
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days
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 means fewer
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 hours and lower incomes, which is not beneficial for workers' lives.
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, in my country
people
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 are dealing with high costs of living and reducing their salaries only causes more poverty.
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, having fewer
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days
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 may lead to better performance and mental health of an individual.
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 it
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 causes poverty in the societies. Personally, I believe it is not beneficial to reduce
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days
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.
Instead
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 of it, companies should boost their benefits to gain more productive employees.

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task response
Ensure all examples provided are as specific and relevant as possible to strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure that each paragraph flows smoothly into the next, providing a seamless reading experience.
task response
The essay clearly presents both sides of the argument and provides a balanced viewpoint.
coherence and cohesion
There is a clear logical structure, with a strong introduction and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
The main points are well-supported with explanations and justifications.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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