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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph describes the spending on customer products
of
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France
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 and the
UK
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 in 2010.
Overall
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, the amount of money spent on personal vehicles was highest
in contrast
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 to perfume in both countries. Personal vehicles saw the highest expenditure, with the
UK
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 spending approximately 450,000
pounds
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 and
France
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 around 400,000
pounds
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. Computers followed as the second-highest category, with the
UK
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 at 350,000
pounds
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 and
France
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 was 20,000
pounds
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 lower. The outgoing cost on
books
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the books
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of
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in
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France
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 was 300,000
pounds
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when
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while
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 the
UK
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 was significantly higher at 400,000
pounds
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. The figure on fragrance
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 revealed a notable difference, with the
UK
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 spending 200,000
pounds
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while
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France
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 was lower ,allocated under 150,000
pounds
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.
Cameras
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Camera
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 spending amount
of
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apply
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UK
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 was
at
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apply
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150,000
pounds
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 and it was twice
lower
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as low
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than
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as
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France
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 with roughly 100,000
pounds
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words france, uk, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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