You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part-time. Write a letter to your boss. In your letter • explain why you want to reduce your working hours • say which hours you would like to work • describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

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Dear Mr. Rep I am writing

this

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letter via email to let you know about my request to reduce my working hours in the main office. As you are aware, in our

last

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meeting on December 18th, we discussed

about

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a university course about innovation in light building materials, and

also

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modern types of isolation

forhigh-rise

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for high-rise

buildings including both introducing, and

execution

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, and at the same

time

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studdingrelated

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studying related

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tutorial standard instructions. Just as you probably remember, you told me to take

theexam

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the exam

, and in

condition

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of passing, I can study

while

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working.

therefor

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, I am two days in

universityand

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university and

the rest of the week will be at work. Undoubtedly, after graduation, I will be able to not only reduce

project's

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costs but

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improve

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construction's

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quality and obviously, by saving

time

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, we will be capable

to complete

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and finish the projects sooner than

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time

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schedule. At the same

time

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, I would appreciate your endless

endeavors

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for supporting

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me, I am looking for your positive response. Yours faithfully, Masoud Reihani

Submitted by MASOUDREIHANI1964 on Wed Dec 25 2024

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coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph contains a single, clear idea for better readability.

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Clarify the schedule by clearly specifying the days you would like to work, beyond just mentioning 'rest of the week'.

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Fix minor typos and awkward phrasing to enhance clarity and professionalism.

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Letter maintains a polite and respectful tone throughout.

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Each section of the prompt is addressed, showing a complete response.

coherence cohesion

The letter flows logically from explaining the reason for reduced hours to the benefits for the employer.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

10 paragraphs

170 words

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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