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The bar charts below describe the weekly hours worked by people in four Scandinavian countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts below describe the weekly hours worked by people in four Scandinavian countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates
weekly
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the weekly
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 time amounts worked by people in four Scandinavian countries
such
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 as
France
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,Denmark,Sweden and
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UK
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the UK
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 in 2002. As a general overview,Sweden had
highest
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the highest
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 working
hour
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hours
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while
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UK
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the UK
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 had the lowest proportion among them. The most predominant
hours
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 were 36-40 in all countries except
France
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 with 31-35.
To begin
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 with, both
France
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 and
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UK's
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the UK's
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 highest working percentages were 50% with 31-35 and 36-40
hours
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 respectively.
UK
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's working
hours
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 are no higher than 10% till 35
hours
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.After slight differences in 36-
40
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40,
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 it gradually increased
till
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to
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 20%.
France
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 had fluctuations but
least
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the least
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 working
hours
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 were 50+. In Denmark, nearly all employers (10%) worked in
same
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the same
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 amount of time except 36-40 workers with
significant
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a significant
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 difference (70%).
Lastly
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, Sweden
had
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apply
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experienced
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the
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least
hours
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 with 1-14.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, uk, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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