The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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These graphs depict the altar in electrical house
machines
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owners and the amount of time they spent weekly from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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, the proportion of owing electrical devices increased differently throw the given period,
while
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the time spent continued to decrease. vacuums started to rapidly grow from 30 in 1920, reaching 50 in 1940.
Whereas
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the refrigerators rocketed from the bottom to exceed the vacuum by little in 1940,
Then
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it jumped more reaching the top in 1980 and
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at the highest level for the remaining time. Back to the vacuums after
1940
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1940,
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it continued to
rose
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significantly until it reached 100
percent
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per cent
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in 2000
then
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steady at
this
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level for the next years. Washing machines climbed fastly from 40 in 1920 to almost 70 in 1960, after that
it
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went down slowly below 70 in 1980.
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it grew gradually exceeding 70 in the final year.
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, throw these years the spent
hours
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per week fell considerably from 50
hours
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per
weak
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week
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in 1920 to 20
hours
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in 1960. From 1960 to 2019 the number fluctuated between 20 to 10
hours
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per
weak
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week
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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