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Band 2

Some people say that web contents should be used to instruct children. Others think that it is not helpful in an educational setting. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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coherence cohesion
Focus on organizing your essay into clear paragraphs, each centered around a single main idea with supporting details.
coherence cohesion
Start with an introduction that clearly outlines the topic and presents both views. End with a conclusion that summarizes your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Read your essay critically to ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. This will help in maintaining the flow of ideas.
task achievement
Ensure you give equal attention and development to both views discussed in the prompt.
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Provide specific examples or situations to support your points, even if they are hypothetical.
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It's great that you've attempted to discuss both views of the topic, as this is a fundamental part of the essay.
task achievement
Your essay clearly shows an attempt to express a personal opinion, which is an important aspect of the task.
coherence cohesion
You have a good starting point for improvement, focusing on refining structure and clarity can greatly enhance your writing.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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