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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
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The pie charts illustrate the proportions of various
age
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 groups in Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
Overall
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, individuals from the 0-14
age
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group
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 made up the largest share of the
population
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 in Yemen in 2000,
while
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 the 15-59
age
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group
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 is predicted to dominate in 2050.
In contrast
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, in Italy, the
working-
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age
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group
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 (15-59
years
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) accounted for the highest proportion in 2000, with the elderly
population
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 expected to rise significantly by 2050. As for Yemen, in 2000, the youngest
age
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group
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 (0-14
years
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) was the leading category, representing 50.1% of the
population
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, slightly exceeding the 15-59
age
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group
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 at 46.3%. Meanwhile, the elderly (60
years
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 and above) comprised only 3.6%, making it the smallest
group
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. Projections for 2050 indicate a notable decrease in the youngest
age
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group
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 to 37.0%,
while
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 the
working-
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age
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group
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 will rise substantially to 57.3%. The share of the elderly is expected to grow modestly, reaching 5.7%. In Italy, in 2000, the
working-
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age
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group
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 (15-59
years
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) held the largest share, constituting 61.6% of the
population
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, followed by the elderly
group
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 at 24.1%. The youngest
age
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group
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 accounted for just 14.3%. By 2050, the proportion of the elderly
population
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 is forecasted to increase dramatically to 42.3%,
while
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 the
working-
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age
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group
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 will decline to 46.2%. Meanwhile, the youngest
age
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group
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 will see a reduction, making up only 11.5% of the total
population
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, population, working-age, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
  • population pyramid
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