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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school asked for your feedback on this course.
Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school.
 • describe what you enjoyed about the course
.   • say how much cooking you’ve done since the course. 
• suggest another cookery course you’d like the school to offer.

#cookery #course #school #feedback #director #you’ve #you’d #offer
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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope that you are doing well. The purpose of
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 letter is to provide you with
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feedback
of
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Indian
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the Indian
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 Cuisine
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, as requested by you. First and foremost, various learning techniques made it very easy for me to learn the
course
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.
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, the practical classes were methodically prepared to provide hands-on experience.
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 that, the group assignments provided an excellent opportunity to collaborate with others and illustrated
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 of it.
Fortunetly
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, after
graduation
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 I have been cooking
everyday
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 to prepare meals for my family and have joined a
part time
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part-time
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 sous-chef job in an Indian fine-dine restaurant in my area.
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, all the currently offered courses are perfect,
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the institute should add
bakery
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a bakery
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course
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 the portfolio. As most of the youth is now enjoying baking mouthwatering pastries and cakes. Thank you for offering
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 an amazing
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 on Indian cuisines, I am forever grateful for joining
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 outstanding
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. Warm regards, Ruchin Patel
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task achievement
Be careful with word choice and sentence construction to avoid minor grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'fortunetly' instead of the correct spelling 'fortunately.'
coherence cohesion
While the letter is well structured, ensure each paragraph focuses solely on one idea to enhance clarity.
task achievement
The letter has a very polite and appropriate tone, suitable for feedback to a course director.
coherence cohesion
The structure of the letter is well-organized with a clear introduction, body, and closing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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