Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support you r answer.

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It is argued that our living standards
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been levelled up thanks to the help of computers,
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others claim
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technology
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detrimental effects to our
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. As I think,
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completely advocated for the first notion and shall I discuss the grounds for my opinion in
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, by using the computer individuals can save time. Computer does the
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that can be inconvenient or stressful,
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as calculations and repeated inserting jobs. Application
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as Exel and Word makes it much easier to do those
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do not have to deal with simple
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that can be annoying
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living their lives.
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, for school alarm application companies, organising student identification is important because they have to send the notice. So, they use Exel to organize the information rapidly.
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, it connects
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much faster.
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use various meeting applications,
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as Zoom or Skype.
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, even though someone is far away, it is possible to reach them and talk to them facing their face.
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, 10 years before most
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couldn't see their family outside the country. They had to come back to Korea to see their family members. Some
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in Korea took more than 10 years of 20 years to see their lovers. In conclusion, I think computers develop the quality of our daily life and connect citizens from all over the world because they prevent us from spending a long time on unimportant
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and connect
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from different countries.

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Language
Make sure to maintain consistency in tense throughout your essay to enhance clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion
Develop transitions between paragraphs to ensure a smoother flow.
Task Achievement
Provide a bit more detail on how specific technologies make life easier to strengthen your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay contains a clear introduction outlining your position on the topic.
Task Achievement
You have used specific examples such as Excel and virtual meeting applications to support your points, which is effective.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay ends with a strong conclusion summarizing your main arguments.
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