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The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the amount of
films
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 produced by five nations in three years.
Overall
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, the highest number of
films
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 produced with
this
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 duration was in state A.
In contrast
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, the least film
production
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 in these three years was in
country
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 E.
Additionally
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 there was a gradual increase in film
production
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 in nation C. In 2007 and 2008 the most produced
films
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 were in
country
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 A with around 85
films
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 per year, In 2009 there was a
decrease
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slight decrease
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 slightly to just over 75
films
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,
However
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 still nation A a higher
production
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 of
films
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 than other nations.
Moreover
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,
Contury
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Country
 B was stable in 2007 and 2008 with only 50
films
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then
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 there was a significant rise in 2009 to around 70
films
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,
While
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 state C increased gradually from just around 10
films
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 in 2007 to reach over 20
films
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 in 2009.
Furthermore
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,
Country
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 E was the least
films
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 produced by just around 15
films
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 per year with a stable rate in these three years.
While
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 the
production
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 of
films
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 fluctuated in the
country
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 D between all periods.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words films, production, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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