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Band 5.5

Some people like to travel outside their country. Others would rather travel to tourist spots in their own country first, before travelling abroad. Which do you prefer to do and why? Include specific details and examples to support your choice.

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‎‏There is no denying the fact that
tourism
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 is the most interesting thing
While
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 it is a commonly held belief that external
tourism
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 allows one to discover a new culture, there is
also
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 an argument that internal
tourism
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 is better for many Causes.
This
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 essay will analyze
this
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 topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On the one hand, travelling abroad opens our minds and broadens our
horizon
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horizons
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.
In other words
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, we will know how they struggled to build their
country
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.
In addition
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, we will know some of their words and their origin.
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, if the tourist visits the Al-Qaser Al-Ahmar Museum, he will learn about the Kuwaiti history and origin of most of the Kuwaiti words.
On the other hand
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,
tourism
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 raises the
country
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’s economy. It is
also
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 possible to say that
tourism
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 attracts investment from multinational companies.
Moreover
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, it helps to improve the standard of living.
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, Saudi Arabia gets from internal travel more than 10 million dollars annually.It is recommended that it will be safer than any
country
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 you will visit. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
this
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 question. On balance,
however
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, I tend to believe that supporting your
country
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 is better than travelling to any
country
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.

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task achievement
Strengthen your arguments with more specific examples and evidence that directly support your preferences.
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Ensure clarity in expressing your opinions by developing them comprehensively rather than presenting them as standalone statements.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the logical flow by more clearly linking ideas between paragraphs and within them.
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Aim to balance the exploration of external and internal tourism with equal depth and analysis.
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You have addressed the prompt by providing viewpoints on both internal and external tourism, which contributes to a well-rounded discussion.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes your opinion and presents a clear stance.
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You have included examples in your essay, notably the Kuwaiti museum visit, which add value and depth to your points.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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