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Band 3

In many countries, there is a growing gap between the technical skills of younger people and those over the age of 50. What problem does this cause, and what solutions could minimize the problem?

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 the current
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 most
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communites
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communities
 around the world
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face
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 a huge gap between
seniors
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senior
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 people and
younge
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young
 in technical skills. From my
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perspective
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 cause, in the past time people used to
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 they
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relied
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write
 to publish a report or send a post, but
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this
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changed as most
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folks
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the folks
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 communicate
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therefore
 technical
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channel
channels
 like WhatsApp app and e-mail.
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, there are many
technoloyies
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technologies
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 been created in
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a few
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 years and it
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considered
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 and not exicted before
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 developing
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new
technioloyeis
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technologies
 is
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causing
 the growth of the gap between our
communites
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communities
. In my
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opinion
, there
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 many corrections to
handel
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handle
this
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 problem and the most
importent
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important
 solution is educating senior members in our communities by offering
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free courses and gaidues,
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also
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and also
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 giving them
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manual user
gaidelines
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guidelines
 for each single
tools
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tool
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. In conclusion,
countres
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countries
 should improve their gaidness tools and provide
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help and education to
citizes
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citizens
cities
 who are
above
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 45 years
and
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old and
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 give some courses to them in order to decrease the
gab
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gap
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.

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coherence cohesion
Work on maintaining consistent terminology and spelling to strengthen understanding. This minimizes any potential confusion.
coherence cohesion
Consider organizing your ideas into clear paragraphs that each explore one unique aspect or solution. This strengthens the logical flow.
introduction conclusion present
Your introduction successfully identifies the issue of the technological skills gap with generational differences, which sets up the discussion well.
task achievement
You've suggested practical solutions such as offering educational courses, which is a relevant approach to addressing the outlined problem.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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