The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the proportion of smoking men in seven nations of various continents and
in addition
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the average of the world in 2000 and 2015.
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, the average amount of male smokers all over the world had a slight shrinkage from 42% in the beginning and 34% in the end. Between both years, Armenia showed a minor decrease from around 76 to 51.
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unlike other mentioned countries, Egypt and Lebanon experienced an increase where they started at 40 and rose to 49 and 45, respectively.
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, Bangladesh succeeded in cutting its smoking adults significantly by almost half of them.
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, Cuba only presented a minute reduction
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3% from 54 to 51. In 2000, Mexico had 35% of its male smoking and
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depleted to 20 in the next 15 years. Almost like Mexico, Australia
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displayed a notable incline, starting with 28 in 2000 and ending with 18 in 2015.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart, percentage, adult male smokers
  • world average, increased, decreased
  • tobacco consumption, lung cancer
  • public health, awareness campaigns
  • government policy, smoking bans
  • health risks, nicotine, tobacco industry
  • chart analysis, data comparison
  • statistical trend, significant fluctuation
  • stagnation, steady rise, moderate fall
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