It is often suggested that schoolchildren should learn how to grow vegetables and keep animals. What are the advantages and disadvantages? Do you think that advantage of this outweigh the disadvantage?

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growing and
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keeping suggests to be learned by a lot of people.
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include having less time to practice other fundamental subjects
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more farmers and increasing
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Expand on the disadvantages, providing specific examples of how learning these farming skills might impact time for other subjects.
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Ensure to include a concluding sentence summarizing your stance.
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Develop more detailed arguments for both advantages and disadvantages to fully explore the topic.
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Use linking words and phrases to better connect your ideas and make the essay flow more smoothly.
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The essay shows an understanding of both the advantages and disadvantages of teaching children how to grow vegetables and keep animals.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly presents your thesis statement, stating your opinion on the advantages outweighing the disadvantages.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agriculture education
  • Practical skills
  • Organic food
  • Gardening
  • Horticulture
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Responsibility
  • Hands-on learning
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Animal husbandry
  • Health and safety concerns
  • Educational outcomes
  • Curriculum integration
  • Resource allocation
  • Cultural preferences
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