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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three region of the world during the 1990's

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three region of the world during the 1990's
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The pie chart illustrates the reasons why the
land
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 around the world experiences
land
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 degradation. The table shows the same causes but it is based on three
regions
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. When considered together, the information suggests that there was no correlation between the data. First of all, the
land
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 around the world experiences
land
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 degradation
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 4 main causes. The highest percentage is overgrazing
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 35%, deforestation at 30%, over-cultivation at 28%, and another factor at 7%.
On the other hand
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, in the 1990s, the table displayed the same problem but it was divided into 3
regions
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 which were North America, Europe, and Oceania. The dominant region was Europe with 23% and it was caused by adding the 3 main factors which were deforestation, overgrazing and
over cultivation
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 with the number between 5.5% and 9.8%.
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, Oceania got 13% which made that region get the second place of the 3regions. The main reason for it was overgrazing with 11.3%.
In contrast
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, it is noticed that
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over-cultivation cultivation
 didn’t have any impact with 0%. The
last
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 one was North America, with a total percentage was 5% and it has 1 main reason which was
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over-cultivation cultivation
 with 3.3%. In conclusion, the chart and tables do not have any correlation because the pie chart describes by word-wide,
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 the table only explains 3
regions
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 but they have the same main problem.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words land, regions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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