Some people spend a lot of money for their wedding ceremonies. However, others feel like it is unnecessary to spend a lot. Discuss both view points and give your own opinion.

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their wedding ceremonies,
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others think it is not necessary to spend more money
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wedding
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and they prefer to keep the wedding
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cheap
rather than
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expensive
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opinion. Most
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nowadays
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wedding, and
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an
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expinsive
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expensive
wedding ceremonies. And mostly these
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individuals
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talking about
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wedding
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what they spent in the
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as well as
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other
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, there are others thinking it is better for them to let the wedding
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unexpinsive
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inexpensive
unexpensive
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simple
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preferring
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the
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money
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the
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honeymoon
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, rather than spending
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the wedding. And those
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the moment rather
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than thinking
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thinking on
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than
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how
people
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goning
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going
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their
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wedding. I feel it is better for
people
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to keep the wedding
smple
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simple
and
chep
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cheap
because having an
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expensive
expansive
wedding
ceremony
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won't do
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thing
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for them, and I think spending the
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money
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the
henymoon
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honeymoon
between the wife and
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husband
suspend
is more
approprate
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appropriate
rather than
spnding
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spending
sending
it to let other
people
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think on their wedding
ceremony
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