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The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts provide data about GDP in England from 1992 until 2000.
Overall
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, there are two different departments in the UK which are
IT
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the IT
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 and
Service
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industry
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 showing their Gross Domestic Product in percentage.
According to
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 the bars, there was a constant acceleration in
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Service
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the Service
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industry
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 from the beginning up to the end of the period and the increase from 1992 to 1994 was about 2.5% which was from 4 per cent to 6.5%.
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, there
were
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was
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also
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 a slight difference during the
last
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 two years on
Service
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 organisation of at least 0.25% and hits its peak point at 8 per cent.
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,
IT
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the IT
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industry
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 has got the highest percentage and it almost doubled
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Service
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the Service
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 department and reached around fifteen
percent
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per cent
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.
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, from 1994 to 2000 IT was above
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Service
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the Service
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industry
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, whilst, earlier in 1992
Service
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were
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was
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also
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 on top of the IT
industry
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.
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, the comparison shows the trending did not reach the maximum of 16
percent
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per cent
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words service, industry with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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