You are planning to go and study English at a school overseas. You would like some information about their courses. Write a letter to the school. In your letter ask about the school say what kind of accommodation you want mention any special requests you have (for example diet).

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am Harshalika Singh. I am registered for the Advanced English Course in Canada.
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would be grateful if you
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provide
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some information about your courses.
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Furthermore
, I would like you to arrange some accommodation near to my campus as I am moving to Canada next month. It will be perfect to stay with a Canadian family as it will improve my
english
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I have done an advanced course in Business English and the host family is of great help to me. I have some special dietary requests . I am a vegan and would like to have a pure
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vegetarian
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am looking forward to
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from you. Yours Sincerely, Harshalika Singh
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Task Achievement
Provide more specifics about the type of information you need about the courses.
Coherence and Cohesion
You may want to ensure parity in mentioning previous experiences in your introduction or conclusion, for better context.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your letter follows a clear structure with separate paragraphs for each point.
Task Achievement
The writing tone is polite and formal, which is suitable for this type of correspondence.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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