The graph below shows the spending of UK residents on visits abroad between 1993 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the spending of UK residents on visits abroad between 1993 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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illustrates
illustates
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illustrates
the expenses of the UK people on worldwide travelling from 1993 to 2013
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the United Kingdom citizens are
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travelling
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abroad for
holiday
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holidays
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, family visits, business and miscellaneous but the
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highest
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spending is for
holiday
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holidays
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.
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the miscellaneous showed the lowest.
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with
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a vacation
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that showed mild fluctuation in finances between 1993 and about 1997 before picking up and
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increased
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steadily
at
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in
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1998
untill
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until
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reaches
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the
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peak
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of
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25
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billions
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billion
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at
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2008.
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the line showed
little
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a little
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drop from about 25
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billions
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to just above 21
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billions
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billion
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at
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the same year.
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it
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stable at just above 21
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untill
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until
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then
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increased again to
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below
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24
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.
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, business was wiggling between
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below
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3 billion
up
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to
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below
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6
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from year 1993 to 2008. In
comparsion
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comparison
with visiting family which showed
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a minimal
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but steady increase
at
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from
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1993 to 2008
whilest
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while
, both family visits and business
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remained
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flat between 2008 to 2013.
Finally
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miscellaneous
remain
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remained
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the lowest reason for
travell
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travel
by about 1
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billion
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from 1993 to 2013.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words billions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • steady increase/decrease
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • trough
  • notable rise/fall
  • economic conditions
  • currency exchange rates
  • international tourism
  • disposable income
  • consumer behavior
  • trend analysis
  • data points
  • historical context
  • inflation-adjusted spending
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