Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while, others think that it is dangerous and unhealthy which opinion do you agree with. Discuss both options and give example.

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Most people believe that having pets would be better for children

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others think it is unsafe and and can be harmful to a child's health. I agree

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both

point

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views

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. Having a

pet

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friend has

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advantage and

disadvantage

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disadvantages

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. We will discuss both

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this

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essay. On the one hand, domestic animals teach a child responsibility and

care

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. They learn how to take

care

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of their

pet

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. Pets

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provides

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companionship,

emotional

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and emotional

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support and teach our children empathy. They develop social skills.

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, studies

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that having a

pet

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lowers the level of stress.

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, coming home from work with a lovely

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is a source of joy. Having one can a great stress relief and mental well-being. One of the

disadvantage

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of having a

pet

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is it takes time, effort and money to properly take

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, children can not take responsibility alone. They need guidance.

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can pose health

risk

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. Pets can transfer

disease

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and allergies.

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, my son has an asthma. Even if he wants to own a

pet

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, he is not allowed. Dog and cat's hair triggers his asthma. In conclusion, everyone

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to own a

pet

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regardless of

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age.

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, taking

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of ourselves first is the main priority.

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task achievement

Ensure to clearly address both perspectives with balanced arguments. The essay leans slightly more towards the advantages of having pets rather than equally addressing both.

coherence cohesion

While the essay is structured with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, transitions between ideas can be smoother. Using linking words will improve the flow.

task achievement

Include more varied examples to support the points effectively. The current examples are a bit limited and focus mainly on personal experience.

coherence cohesion

The introduction clearly sets out the two viewpoints and the writer's intention to discuss both sides.

coherence cohesion

The essay includes a conclusion that summarizes the writer's stance effectively.

task achievement

Personal experiences are used to support the points made, adding a touch of authenticity to the arguments.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

212 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

companion
responsibility
care
empathy
compassion
social skills
transmit
diseases
allergies
safety risks
time
effort
money
mature
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Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while, others think that it is dangerous and unhealthy which opinion do you agree with. Discuss both options and give example.

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Many of the world’s cities are currently facing a serious housing shortage. What are some of the reasons for this shortage, and what solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.