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The chart and table below give information about visitors at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at lea

The chart and table below give information about visitors at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at lea
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The pie chart shows the proportion of
tourists
Use synonyms
 to Australian resorts on a specific holiday.
Moreover
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, The second chart shows the number of
days
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 of stay there, the most popular accommodations and the main activities which they have done.
Overall
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, the Asian
tourists
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 were the largest group who came to
Australia
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.
Furthermore
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, The table shows they preferred to stay at 5-star hotels. The proportion of
people
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 from Asia who visited
Australia
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 was the highest at 37%.
However
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, the number of
days
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 which they stayed there was the lowest among the others (7
days
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). The percentage of
tourists
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 from Europe was the second highest at 35%.
Moreover
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, The average length of stay in
Australia
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 was the highest at 16
days
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. The figure for American
people
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 who went to
Australia
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 was after these two groups at 18% and they stayed for 14
days
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. In the end, the lowest proportion was for
tourists
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 from another region (10%).
People
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 from Asia preferred to stay at 5-star hotels,
Nonetheless
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, the European and other countries
tourists
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' favourite accommodation was Camping or Caravan. The
people
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 from the US were interested in 4-star hotels. The main activity between Asians and Americans was sightseeing.
However
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, the European
tourists
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 liked swimming and sunbathing and other
tourists
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 did surfing.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, days, australia, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 6 times.
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