the graph and chart below give information about participants ưho entered the olympics since it began.

the graph and chart below give information about participants ưho entered the olympics since it began.
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about
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attendees who have attended the Olympics since it started.
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, It can be seen the number of
participants
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who took part in the
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increased by 88 years. The proportion of women sharply increased from 1984 to 2012 and the number of men accounted for the highest than women. On that hand, people who joined the Olympics experienced a significant growth, by approximately 3000 people in 1924 and peaked at 11000 people in 2012. Specifically, the percentages of women just accounted for a little in 1924, with not over 100
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.
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, in 1984 that proportion increased to 1500
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. Since 2012, the percentage tripled, from 1500 to nearly 5000
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in 2012.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words participants with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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