the graph and chart below give information about participants ưho entered the olympics since it began.

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attendees who have attended the Olympics since it started.

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, It can be seen the number of

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increased by 88 years. The proportion of women sharply increased from 1984 to 2012 and the number of men accounted for the highest than women. On that hand, people who joined the Olympics experienced a significant growth, by approximately 3000 people in 1924 and peaked at 11000 people in 2012. Specifically, the percentages of women just accounted for a little in 1924, with not over 100

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. Since 2012, the percentage tripled, from 1500 to nearly 5000

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in 2012.

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Dec 31, 2024

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the graph and chart below give information about participants ưho entered the olympics since it began.

In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people believe that culture will be ruined if it is used to earn tourism revenue, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting culture. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Directors and leaders of organizations are often older people. Some people say that it is better to have young people as leaders. To what extent do you agree or disagree?