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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 reasons to support
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 argument. In my opinion, I agree that
professionals
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 should work in their own
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due to
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 several reasons.
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, it is their responsibility to serve the
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 in their
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.
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 is because they
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used many resources for their education.
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, each
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 should protect the careers
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 their own
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otherwise
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people
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 from other
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 will become competitors and leave the natives in
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poor condition.
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,
professionals
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 who work in the
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 they trained would
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 with
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 and the native
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, they would have
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 quality of life when working in the same environment.
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, some
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 might be in
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 shortage of
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, like doctors, and engineers. Allowing
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 from other
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 to work in their
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 might alleviate
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 difficulty.
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 can help
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 the natives to become
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professionals
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 in the future.
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introduction conclusion present
Develop an introduction that outlines both sides of the debate and clearly states your stance. This will provide a clearer framework for your essay.
relevant specific examples
Include specific examples or hypothetical scenarios to support the points made in favor of each viewpoint. This will make your argument more persuasive and realistic.
introduction conclusion present
Consider concluding your essay with a summary of your main points and a restatement of your opinion. This will reinforce your argument and provide a sense of closure.
complete response
The essay covers both viewpoints on the topic, presenting a balanced discussion.
logical structure
There's a logical progression of ideas, with points clearly stated and followed by reasons.
supported main points
The essay outlines why professionals should stay in their training country, focusing on responsibility and resource utilization. This adds depth to the argument.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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