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The illustration below shows how the water cycle works and the pie charts provide some statistical information.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The illustration below shows how the water cycle works and the pie charts provide some statistical information.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart provides information about how the pie charts and the water cycle show some mathematical data.
Overall
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, the data reveals clear trends. Highlighting that health notable cycling to
work
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, and fitness
was
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were
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 reasons where
as
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whereas
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 comfort reason of was the
of
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apply
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primary result for driving to
work
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. Observing the chart in more detail, health, fitness and less pollution had the largest amount & of reasons for using
bike
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a bike
the bike
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 to
work
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 with around 30% Furия,
However
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, no costs
was
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were
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 seen as the lowest reason about 12% Looking into the reasons for using cars to
work
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. Comfort was the first which was the highest proportion. One Striking
a
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apply
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piece of information to be noticed is that both need to carry things and
faster
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are faster
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 than cycling had an equal amount of roughly 40%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • evaporation
  • condensation
  • precipitation
  • transpiration
  • infiltration
  • groundwater
  • runoff
  • water vapor
  • cloud formation
  • solar energy
  • hydrological cycle
  • ecosystem
  • freshwater distribution
  • glaciers and ice caps
  • surface water
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