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The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of free time exercises of Australian young people.
Overall
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, the data reveals clear trends. Highlight a notable amount in watching TV and videos,
whereas
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 skateboarding was seen as the lowest percentage. Observing the chart in more detail, boys'
number
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 in riding a bike was higher than girls' numbers on computer games accounting for around 70% and almost 60% respectively.
Furthermore
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, women's figures in skateboarding were double the
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 of men in computer games with almost 40% of females and nearly 80% of males.
In contrast
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, the
number
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 of boys in art which was about 59% was lower than the
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 of girls. One striking piece of information to be noticed is that both boys and girls watching TV and videos had an equal amount of roughly 100%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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