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Band 5

plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment.what damage does plastic do to the environment?What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?

#plastic #bags #bottles #environment #damage #governments #individuals
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human society is advancing, the use of
single-use
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plastic
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 is rising. We cannot deny the harmful effects of
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plactic
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plastic
pollution
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 on our
envionment
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environment
. When these polymers enter the landfills and waterbodies, our lands and marine life are
effected
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affected
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 negatively.
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 essay will focus on the adverse
effect
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effects
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 of one-time-use
plastics
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 and provide ideas which can be implemented by
government
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the government
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 and individuals to tackle
this
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 ongoing battle.
Plastic
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waste
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generated
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especially generated from
packagings
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packaging
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are
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 on the rise, and by the end of its
cyle
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cycle
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,
they
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it
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 end up either in landfills or oceans.
The society
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 is struggling to
dispose
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this
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 exponential quantity of
waste
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 which will take millions of years to decompose. At the same time,
marine
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the marine
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 ecosystem is disturbed as the
plastic
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waste
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 is breaking down into micro-
plastics
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 and getting
comsumed
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consumed
 by animals.
According to
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 global
plastic
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 usage statistics, the United States of America is the leading country in
plastic
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pollution
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 per capita.
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implys
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implies
 that people in
States
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the States
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 are relying more on
single-use
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plastics
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.
Government
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Governments
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 across the globe are opting for sustainable ways to tackle
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 ongoing struggle of
plastic
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pollution
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. Solutions like complete bans on
plastic
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packagings
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packaging
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 and educating
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society on
waste
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 management principles of
three
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the three
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 R's (Reduse-Reuse-Recycle) should be encouraged. People should
transistion
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transition
 to eco-friendly options and limit
single-use
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plastics
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.
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, one can easily carry a metal bottle for drinking water rather than consuming a
plastic
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 packaged one. To sum it all up,
plastic
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pollution
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 poses adverse
effect
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effects
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 on
environment
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the environment
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.
These
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waste
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 ends up in the ecosystem and
take
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takes
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 millions of years to
breakdown
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break down
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. To tackle these issues governments should ban the usage of
single-use
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plastics
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 at the same time individuals should switch to more reliable
environment friendly
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alternative
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task response
You have made a clear attempt to address the task by discussing both the problems caused by plastic and potential solutions. To improve, try to develop your ideas more comprehensively. For example, include more specific examples and elaborate further on how governments and individuals can implement these solutions.
coherence and cohesion
In terms of coherence and cohesion, the essay has a logical progression of ideas. However, some transitions could be smoother. Pay attention to the flow of your ideas to ensure each paragraph connects seamlessly to the next. Using transition phrases and topic sentences will help guide the reader through your essay.
introduction conclusion present
Your introduction effectively sets up the topic and outlines the structure of the essay. This helps the reader understand what to expect.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points discussed and reiterates your stance on the issue, providing a clear and concise ending to your essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plastic pollution
  • ecosystems
  • wildlife
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • air pollution
  • strict regulations
  • plastic consumption
  • eco-friendly alternatives
  • sustainable packaging
  • recycling facilities
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