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There 2 maps of Paradise Island in the past and the present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevan

There 2 maps of Paradise Island in the past and the present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevan
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The diagram shows how Paradise Island evolved over time.
Overall
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, is appreciated that the land has been modified in order to be accessible for tourism.
Firstly
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, in the first image, is noticeable that the main purpose of travelling there was to investigate as the only building was a scientific research station on the left side, with a little pier to facilitate access to it and the rest was completely virgin with a natural spring on the opposite side of the island. Now focusing on the other figure it is noticeable that the interests have changed as there is no longer a research station, it has been replaced by a hotel complex with a round swimming pool on the northwest side of that building.
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, the wild jungle has been deforested to construct a small path that connects the hotel with the restaurant, next to it there is now a BBQ area.;
also
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, close to the natural spring there is a cafe.
Moreover
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, a cycle path surrounds the coast, which leads to the rocks and the scenic lookout on the right top, and just on top of the hotel, there is a beach with a swimming permitted area.
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 of the touristification, the pier has been rebuilt so as to be able to fit longer boats like cruises.
To sum up
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, the upgrades that have been made to the island are because of economic interests as all of the improvements have been made so as to their satisfaction.
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