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Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live. Write an email to your friend. In your email, Describe where you lived when you were a student at the university recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation warn himlher of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation

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Dear Prabind, I'm delighted with the news that you have received the letter of acceptance from my University.
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 deserves a grand celebration once you make your way here. Currently, I'm staying near Fairway Road at Cedarwood
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 in Kitchener.
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 is in fact 40
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 away by bus from the University of Waterloo and trust me you will not prefer to make
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 trip in winter. So
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, I will suggest you move near Erb's
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 in Waterloo which is 5 mins walking distance to the University. In the earlier months of my course,
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 stayed there which to date I consider the best location for students. Erb's
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 is in close proximity to major bus routes,
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 that you could find supermarkets
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 as Walmart, Nofrills and Freshco nearby.
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, the nightlife is amazing. Update your location to Erb's
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 Waterloo in the Facebook marketplace to look for accommodation,
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this
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 check on Kijiji for local posting. Anything between $450-$550 for sharing is generally considered a decent deal.
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, do not pay in advance, we have been listening to complaints where individuals are taking money upfront for a stay, and later calling it a day. Update me once you find something to your liking. Your friend. Akash Pipal
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To further improve task response, consider elaborating on your personal experience, perhaps by mentioning a specific positive aspect or memory about living near Erb's Street to make your recommendation more personal and convincing.
coherence cohesion
Consider concluding the email on a more personal note, perhaps by expressing your enthusiasm to see your friend or offering further help with the move.
task achievement
Great use of personal experience to give practical advice on accommodation options.
coherence cohesion
Logical structure is maintained throughout the email with clear sections on description, recommendation, and warning.
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Use of specific examples such as mentioning Walmart and the specific price range adds relevance and depth to the advice given.

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