A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as a human, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including use for foods and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The discussion about animal
rights
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been separating
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since
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decades.
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some
people
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argues
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that
animals
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have the same
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as
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humans
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, others think that the sole purpose of
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of
animals
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is to fulfill our needs. In
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essay, I will discuss both views and give my opinion on
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debate.
People
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that
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support animal
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argue that
animals
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are living things that have the same characteristics
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human
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humans
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,
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it is logical to think that
animals
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also
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have certain
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that human has.
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, these
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need to be respected by all creatures including us.
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,
people
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support
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view
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would see
treatment
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the treatment
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of
animals
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as a means of something other than their welfare
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violating the natural
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of living things,
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as slaughtering
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for food purposes or hurting
animals
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for research purposes. 
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,
people
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that
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rejecting
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this
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view
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argue that
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humans
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is
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different creatures
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animals
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because of our
distictive
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distinctive
characteristics. The
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intelligence
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human
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humans
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making
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us separated from the rest of all creatures
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on
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planet. Sometimes,
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side
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also
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often based their arguments on
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a religous
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religous
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religious
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human
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humans
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as the
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in
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planet,
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animals
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(and
also
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plants) are created by God as resources for us.
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, based on
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view
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, it is not technically wrong to use
animals
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as a means to reach other goals,
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as doing research or
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our diet demands.
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both opinions have
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point, I believe that the good thing we could do
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to still utilise
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for our needs and simultaneously respect the
rights
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of
animals
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by treating them well.
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, the treatment
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rising
animals
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for food consumption
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to be ethically correct with
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measurement that ensures the welfare of the
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are
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not
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violated,
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as conducting a slaughtering process in
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most possible way to minimise pain for the
animals
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. In conclusion, I argue that it is important to maintain our respect for animal
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and welfare conditions
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we use them to satisfy our needs.
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balanced the two extremes that prevailed in the discussion about
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animal
rights
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.
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Try to provide more specific examples to support your points, such as citing studies or real-life cases related to animal rights.
task achievement
In your body paragraphs, ensure that all points are developed with a balance of support and explanation to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Work on refining transitions between the ideas within paragraphs to make your essay even more cohesive.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing your argument.
task achievement
Both viewpoints on the issue are discussed, showing a comprehensive consideration of the topic.
coherence cohesion
The essay maintains a logical structure throughout, with points generally well-organized.
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