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The bar chart below shows Scotland's exports to the rest of the UK and the rest of the world for the year 2014

The bar chart below shows Scotland's exports to the rest of the UK and the rest of the world for the year 2014
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The bar chart below illustrates Scotland’s exports to the rest of the world and the rest of the United Kingdom for 2014. The
export
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 includes
such
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industries
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 as agriculture,forestry, fishing and mining,manufacture of food and drink, chemicals, metals, electrical and instrument engineering,
other
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and other
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 manufacturing and services.
Overall
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, Scotland exported more to the
ROW
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 than to the
UK
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 in most
industries
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, with a few exceptions. The largest
export
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 was business services, finance, hotels and restaurant services, which brought in 13.8
billion
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 from
ROW
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 compared to 1.7
billion
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 from
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UK
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the UK
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.
Similarly
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, Chemicals and Mineral Products were significant, with £9.5
billion
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 exported to
ROW
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 versus £5
billion
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 to the
UK
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. Interesting to note that certain
industries
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 like electrical and instrument engineering showed higher
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export
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exports
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 to the
UK
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(4
billion
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),
while
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ROW
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 brought 2.3
billion
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.
In addition
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,
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UK
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the UK
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 almost overtook the
ROW
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 in
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export
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the export
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 of chemicals and mineral products, difference is 0.6
billion
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of
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apply
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pounds. In summary,
while
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 Scotland exported to
ROW
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overall
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, specific
industries
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,
such
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 as electrical and instrument engineering were more dependent on trade with
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UK
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the UK
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, such, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, industries, row, uk, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exports
  • International regions
  • Trade relationships
  • Economic impact
  • Market analysis
  • Notable differences
  • Trade trends
  • Speculation
  • Variation
  • Significance
  • Impact
  • Prevalent factors
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